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Taizhou, Jiangsu, China – July 8, 2022: Great news for the people of Taizhou as the 20th Games of Jiangsu Province will be held in Taizhou on August 28^th, 2022. With Taibao and Fengwa as the mascots, Taizhou's treasure and renowned mascot Elk will be hosting the audience as Taibao. As early as a thousand years ago, Taizhou was his hometown that once flourished. After performing an epic of "I Am Homeward Bound", Elk went back to Taizhou, the hometown where he missed so much.

“In fairy tales, I am the mount of Jiang Ziya, an ancient beast and in the history of thousands of years, I am the exclusive darling of the royal family, with my own aristocratic atmosphere.” Said Elk, while talking about the history of Taizhou. “Although it seems that I am lazy, once I run, I am the ‘king of short distance events’.” Elk added. According to Elk, two years ago, they were lucky enough to participate in the competition for mascots of the Beijing Olympic Games, but they lost to Bing Dwen Dwen and Shuey Rhon Rhon due to inadequate preparation. This time, the 20th Games of Jiangsu Province will be held at home, and nobody can miss them.

In the perspective of a classic inspiration, Chao Shuo-zhi in Song Dynasty wrote in The Story of Hailing, “Outside the hundred-year-old elk, it was a turbulent day in Phoenix.” Phoenix is an ancient god beast, an auspicious thing. There is Phoenix Pier in Taizhou, and Phoenix is also the image representative of Taizhou, which can completely match the Elk. Imitating the former rivals Bing Dwen Dwen and Shuey Rhon Rhon, Elk also made a cartoon transformation. 

“My antlers are curved, my arms are running, my body is yellow, and I wear blue clothes.” Said Elk in a recent interview, while talking about the games. “My partner, Phoenix, has a phoenix on her head, spreading her wings and taking off. She is all red, with green clothes.” The mascot added. According to Elk, both partners complement each other. The colorful halo of Bing Dwen Dwen symbolizes the "Ice Ribbon" of the National Speed Skating Hall of the Beijing Winter Olympics. Taizhou is a water city, painted with the river lines of Shangcheng, with rich local characteristics.

All the decoration have been completed for the games and the preparations are in the final stages. The next step is naming and in terms of the famous Bing Dwen Dwen and Shuey Rhon Rhon, they are not only easy to remember and read, but also have deep cultural implications. Elk is the auspicious beast of Taizhou, while Phoenix is the image ambassador of Taizhou and a lovely doll, and the name "Fengwa" is not bad.

The dress is bright, and the name is loud. After meticulous preparation, Fengwa and Taibao were easily elected as mascots of The 20th Games of Jiangsu Province. They are not only available in form of cute plush toys, but also in digital collections, ice cream and other forms of transformation. The mascots are involved in imitating, reference and originality, which is why they were successfully elected as the mascot of The 20th Games of Jiangsu Province.

“Our mission is to empower The 20th Games of Jiangsu Province, beautify a city and create a happy city.” Said Elk, who will be Taibao and will be performing alongside Fengwa. Both mascots will spare no effort to use more fantastic ideas and more original scenes to show their enthusiasm, friendliness and openness in Taizhou.

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